First off, narration, different voices and pacing was really great, all that achieved by Mae Ruling. Definitely will look out for other audiobooks she might narrate.

In summary, this is a YA highschool drama with supernatural elements with an awesome premise and world building, but has a long way to go in regards of showing, telling and foreshadowing.

I will not be reading the rest of the series, though.

In detail:

*Too much telling, too little showing*
dialogue and descriptions are used as a crutch to explain to the reader what's going on instead of showing it through a scene and letting reader figure it out. Foreshadowing and hints could help with this. 

*info dump*
Dialogue and internal dialogue's only purpose seems to be explaining what's happening or why it's happening. Author should probably look up about "cow tools" in the writing community.

*Unrealistic dialogue*
Every character agrees with each other too easy and quickly. Even "bad guys".
No one has negative feelings for more than a scene, they're too "mature".

*MC could be considered a Mary-Sue*
MC is too perfect. Her flaws aren't even really treated as flaws. This isn't an interview where you say your biggest weakness is perfectionism. 
From chapter 1 it's repeated to us how perfect MC's life was.
Maybe it's more of an author self-insert, about how she would've liked to react and what kind of relationships she'd like to have.

*Insta love*
MC falls in love with new character from chapter 1, scene 1. Even when having a boyfriend of years. Kinda cringy in the first quarter of the book.
To be fair, insta love is just hard to swallow in general.

*Highschool drama > supernatural*
80% of the book was more about teenage relationships and writing about school than about the supernatural element.
Also, it was too obvious there would be a supernatural element. Everyone kept looking at MC as if they knew something she didn't. All the time. It could've been hinted at subtly a few times instead.

*World building*
Awesome premise. Great world building in general. A whole society, rules and original elements. My only complain is that the real " bad guys" don't seem to have a clear reason to be evil.