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A review by kaabtik
Phantasma by Kaylie Smith
Did not finish book. Stopped at 34%.
started reading this bc it was recommended from a ig reel sent by my partner. i went in blind and it was only about 1/4 in did i realize the that it was vv duol to caraval - and pagbasa sa synopsis mao jd diay.
while i have my own thoughts sa caraval, i did enjoy the first book so since similar mn sila ug elements sa first book, then i expected to like it pud. but i did not.
first off, i'm unsure sa setting niya. i know na new orleans, but the contemporary na language is strongly jarring when thinking of it being set in the 19th century. another is how dili ko sure if gituyo na juxtaposed kaayo ang attitudes ni gen ug ni ophie but instead of it being that they are same blood, different bloodthirst kind na vibes, nahimong not like other girls syndrome sa mid-2010s na vibe.
the writing alternates from very ornate to straightforward - which is not supposedly an issue in and of itself pero wala siya na utilize properly in this sense. off and clunky siya, and at times frustrating kay ang mga parts na dili necessary mag intricate language gipa-sobraan dayun ang parts na nice unta makita ang pagshow case sa author sa iyang literary prowess kay wala flat kaayo. one particular scene was the speedy introduction of the many side characters na supposedly atong ma get to know further as the story progresse. instead of that though, ophie learns of their backgrounds and aspirations of joining phantasma through passing rumors — which we can read in one paragraph. dili siya satisfying to read.
however, sometimes the writing is just oks lang then you get hit in the most in your face description of something that will be essential to the kinks that the characters will do when they inevitably explore each other's bodies. and that's fine. but again, if pwede man diay ma better ang writing nganong dili man consistent na good siya? like ang description sa magic ni ophie kay hastang ka boring — sparks ra tawn. unya sa pagdescribe sa aning laki (blackworth?? blackwell?? girl ambot) kay taas kaayo be ffr.
anyway, while naay part of me that wants to know how this goes, the writing really throws me off so dili na ko mucontinue.
while i have my own thoughts sa caraval, i did enjoy the first book so since similar mn sila ug elements sa first book, then i expected to like it pud. but i did not.
first off, i'm unsure sa setting niya. i know na new orleans, but the contemporary na language is strongly jarring when thinking of it being set in the 19th century. another is how dili ko sure if gituyo na juxtaposed kaayo ang attitudes ni gen ug ni ophie but instead of it being that they are same blood, different bloodthirst kind na vibes, nahimong not like other girls syndrome sa mid-2010s na vibe.
the writing alternates from very ornate to straightforward - which is not supposedly an issue in and of itself pero wala siya na utilize properly in this sense. off and clunky siya, and at times frustrating kay ang mga parts na dili necessary mag intricate language gipa-sobraan dayun ang parts na nice unta makita ang pagshow case sa author sa iyang literary prowess kay wala flat kaayo. one particular scene was the speedy introduction of the many side characters na supposedly atong ma get to know further as the story progresse. instead of that though, ophie learns of their backgrounds and aspirations of joining phantasma through passing rumors — which we can read in one paragraph. dili siya satisfying to read.
however, sometimes the writing is just oks lang then you get hit in the most in your face description of something that will be essential to the kinks that the characters will do when they inevitably explore each other's bodies. and that's fine. but again, if pwede man diay ma better ang writing nganong dili man consistent na good siya? like ang description sa magic ni ophie kay hastang ka boring — sparks ra tawn. unya sa pagdescribe sa aning laki (blackworth?? blackwell?? girl ambot) kay taas kaayo be ffr.
anyway, while naay part of me that wants to know how this goes, the writing really throws me off so dili na ko mucontinue.