Although the story had a lot of promise, it wasn’t executed well in my opinion, and after a while I simply gave up trying to push through it.

The narrative is punctuated by these lengthy descriptions of events so abstract, you can’t even picture in your mind what is supposed to be going on. Entire pages will be made up of these nonsensical strings of bizarre imagery. I get that describing things like the creation of the universe is going to require a bit of imagination, but I think it can be done in a way that doesn’t leave the reader completely lost.

Also, the spoken dialogue between characters is often intertwined with their thoughts in such a way that becomes really confusing. Like: “quote” ‘thought’ “quote” ‘thought’ and it bounces around between characters so at times you’re like wait whose thoughts are these? Or you have to backtrack to double-check whether or not something was said out loud because after a while “ and ‘ start to look too similar.

I liked the idea, I just think it could’ve used another round of editing to shave down some of the unnecessary parts and make the rest easier to read.