not bad but very confusingly written at times. the paragraphs jumped from character to character and year to year too often and it felt random and i kept getting confused before i knew what was happening. I wish she put little page divider lines (—).
i thought that the story really lacked a description of setting and context. i didn’t know which city they were in, how old they were, what Lily looked like or anything for ages. it was hard to imagine and get the movie in my head going